This is a story of Pebbles. I will need permission from some people to use their chao in this story.
Prologue
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"Go!" He screamed "Run!"
He nodded as he ran, grabbing the egg. He was almost out before he felt a sharp pain in his back he looked back, his eyes opening in horror. There, in his back was a spear! He had completely forgotten about the guards at the door. He ran into the lobby, his back throbbing with pain. Several more spears chasing him as he approached the neutral garden. "Sonic!" He exclaimed "Here's and egg. It's mom is dead and its dad almost is... Huff... Puff... Sonic..."
The world went dark around him as an orange cocoon formed around him
Chapter 1
Spoiler:
It was getting cramped. He couldn't do anything about the inevitable. He would have to go out sooner or later. He looked at the deep blue eggshell. It was nice, in here. He didn't want to leave. Then, he heard a crack. His eyes opened in realization. He gulped. He made some sort of baby sound. He came out and was imediently hit by the blinding light of this place. The checkered ground kinda creeped him out. He looked at a sign: Green Hill Zone, it read. He wondered what the heck that meant. He saw another sign next to a creek. It read: Pebbles Creek He smiled. He liked that word. Pebbles. It had a nice ring to it. He would call himself that. He smiled. Then, he noticed a strange thing on the ground
It was a footprint. He saw more of them. He chased after them, giggling in a childish manner. He didn't want to leave his eggshell, but these footprints were his only clue.
He followed the footprints a little longer until there was a strange difference. The was a body print. And a second set of footprints. The one seemed to carry the other one off. He shuddered in relization. A murder! Pebbles thought.
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I got a Wii U! Send me a friend request! NN ID: KantuK
I'm gone for a while, and would love to come back soon, maybe around Christmas?
I was actuall the author of a book, I told my brother to make 3 copies of it, so, he went in the home office and stuck it in the paper shredder, thinking it was the photocopier
And I'd love some tips!
I got a Wii U! Send me a friend request! NN ID: KantuK
I'm gone for a while, and would love to come back soon, maybe around Christmas?
I hardly know what's going on here. Could it be someone abandoned something, or is someone dying? Who is attacking? Why does Sonic have anything to do with the story? Just some pointers on how to detail your story a little :3 that's all I have for now. Other than that, this is a well written story in my opinion!
It was getting cramped. He couldn't do anything about the inevitable. He would have to go out sooner or later. He looked at the deep blue eggshell. It was nice, in here. He didn't want to leave. Then, he heard a crack. His eyes opened in realization. He gulped. He made some sort of baby sound. He came out and was imediently hit by the blinding light of this place. The checkered ground kinda creeped him out. He looked at a sign: Green Hill Zone, it read. He wondered what the heck that meant. He saw another sign next to a creek. It read: Pebbles
Creek. Pebbles Creek. He liked that word. Pebbles. He decided he would call himself Pebbles. It had a nice ring to it. He smiled. Then, he noticed a strange thing on the ground
It was a footprint. He saw more of them. He chased after them, giggling in a childish manner. He didn't want to leave his eggshell, but these footprints were his only clue.
He followed the footprints a little longer until there was a strange difference. The was a body print. And a second set of footprints. The one seemed to carry the other one off. He shuddered in relization. A murder! Pebbles thought.
I got a Wii U! Send me a friend request! NN ID: KantuK
I'm gone for a while, and would love to come back soon, maybe around Christmas?
^ Yeah! Plus, then I would hate on you in real life. And I'd doubt you'd recognize me. But, if you see some blond kid that's the size of a rat and most likely has a 3DS or iPod in his hands, that's me.
I got a Wii U! Send me a friend request! NN ID: KantuK
I'm gone for a while, and would love to come back soon, maybe around Christmas?