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Some Poems ;)

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Peace Is Everywhere:

Down in a grave yard,
Peace can be made,
Love can be found,
Even ghosts are friendly,

Down near the sun
There are lots of flowers,
Its another sign of peace,
Pick the flowers there,
Play in those field,
Peace Is Everywhere.

Chao Courage:
Even if their small,
they are strong little creatures,
Three of them could carry a small log,
They have big hearts,
And have so much courage,
The courage to be friendly to their owners!

Bowl On The Table:
There's a bowl on the table,
There's something delicious in it,
what could it be?,
its some sort of cereal but I can't see it,
the bowl is to big,
I get the spoon and see that its...
PORRIDGE!



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nice poems there :)
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These are really good Eevee. ;)
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Thank you, Dragonite and MoonDancer :3
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They need work though.
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You always say that, Snowy.
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I think my favorite is the first one. Sometimes short poems say a lot, and the graveyard one is one of those poems. It definitely captures a playful mood that makes you smile. There are some spelling errors, but they didn't really affect me and some are probably accidents anyway. Really nice job.
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Batty wrote:I think my favorite is the first one. Sometimes short poems say a lot, and the graveyard one is one of those poems. It definitely captures a playful mood that makes you smile. There are some spelling errors, but they didn't really affect me and some are probably accidents anyway. Really nice job.
I've learnt how some words go like their, they're and there are not the same. And were and where are different. And graveyard is one word. So yeah I do make those mistakes :3
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It's okay,I make spelling Errors too. ;)
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Summer:

A bird flew past,
It was hot,
I got burned by the sun,
Its a very hot day,
This means its...
SUMMER!



Sorry its to short.
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