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revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #4: DOGS AM TALKING)

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hi there everyone. yeah i've stopped going on ci for quite a while and i'm not going to go on some kind of odyssey about my absence here. but i remember when i was here, and the internet was so simple back then. so magical. the blissful days before i relinquished all of my sanity to homestuck and anime okay.

yeah and you know those creepypastas i used to review. i feel like some more fun with those. don't expect this to be like an organized thing like my thread two years ago was. k? k. if the old thread was like disney movies then this thread is like kill la kill porno fanart. with slightly less dignity.

A-BALLISTIC-TOUCAN (oh yeah i haven't call myself 'blazing groudon' in years i mean seriously it sounds like a drug reference or some ****) HAS RETURNED TO GET 2SPOPSPOKYMOMABOBLEABLE3URSKELETONS

and during however many of these reviews i do, i want you to read them while listening to this in the background. every last one of you.

story #1

i actually didn't even have a story lined up when i thought of this thread let me see if i can pull something out of my ass this'll do
it all happend when i started playing my faveret game pokemon silver i was playing for about 3 weeks now when IT happend now this was on a popular gameing site called playR now maost of you know what it is for those who dont know its a gameing site for GB games now dont hate the website or the game.

I loaded my file as usual I was shocked to find that the loading screen for gen 2 games when i loaded it up i found that i could not access my save file it would just load up as if you where starting a new game enraged furious even as i was about to rage i saw that it was black and white backround but the pokemon sprites had the same color……RED out of curiosity i continued playing the game as usual silver asked what time it was before i could answer the screen cut to black after a few minutes my sprirte appered normaly as if i answerd all the qustions silver asked i noticed something it was black and white (except for the sprites.)and no music as i walked down stairs i saw that silvers mom waent there soon after i got a response saying _______ used fly i flew to tin tower where the legendarys where i talk to them “Raiku said “you did this” Entei said “just go” then i saw it where suicune was just empty i saw that entei and raiku where chaned and laghter echoed then it hit me i was playing silver that means my rivel gets the clear bell suicune has to obay gold out of its own free will then i saw it suicune was crying blood as gold laghed i still play pokemon but i play it with that image in my head.
maybe this is a troll but i don't even know. look at all of those grammar mistakes. no capitals. who would write like that and expect to be taken seriously (haha shut up.)
maost of you know what it is
maost. maost. lauren maost and my little paony.
for those who dont know its a gameing site
yes enlighten me sen-sei
but the pokemon sprites had the same color……RED
oh sweet jesus not the RED
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Entei said “just go”
well gee it sure sounds like entei is really fed up with your ****
Spoiler:
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laghed
laghed. laghead. lag head. i think i know why he's being mad and cruel or whatever the **** he's doing. it's because he's using internet explorer.

overall this story really had more cliches than sonic fanfiction. it was the general "2spooku" feel coupled with more unintentionally bad grammar and other bull. i don't even know why there are so many stories like this.

what if that's cause the stories are all true.

what if i'm angering the gh0sts

are you next :darkcool: :omochao: :darkcool: :darkcool: :sway: :chaocry:

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so yeah that was... ...something. i'm going to find and do more of these (and maybe i'll return to taking them at least partially as seriously as i did back in the old days and putting in less ****ty fandom references.) and don't expect me to fully return to ci. i might post in a few threads but probably not the same magnitude i used to. whatever. good night and don't let the spooks get you.
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like some kind of zombie

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ok blazing groudon is the back

how ya doin pardner haven't seen ya in a loooooong time (or ever)

also get rid of that mean look photo, flipping the bird is taboo on ci

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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like some kind of zombie

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But it fits so perfectly. i'll just spoil it okay i don't think anyone's going to pass out

also in unrelated news, i'm looking through topics for the next issue and i've found quite a few worthy submissions. Actually, I'll post one now. While I don't feel like typing with completely horrible grammar.

i'm working on story 2 okay i'm almost done
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #2: HALllowwweeee

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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #2: HALllowwweeee

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Yes it's like a Christmas miracle except in April. The delayed reaction is likely the result of a laghed somewhere.

Story 2 is up.

Story #2

http://www.crappypasta.com/night-halloween/
It was the night of halloween, Sarra had just moved it to a mansion with her family. She got this strange feeling, a feeling that began to worry her…She got a vision, a strange vision, a vision that was like she was possessed. She wasnt in pain or anything… She was worried because when she went to her room to unpack, she heard a screeching noise, nobody was there. She went downstairs. Nobody was there. She was scared… It was 6:00p.m. She got dressed for Halloween. *SCREECH* She gasped. She yelled, “HELP! IM HAUNTED.” She went outside hoping to find someone, she found someone, someone to know about her house. She just screamed… She screamed and screamed. Later that night, she had a dream, a dream that she was getting possessed by a demon or something. The next day it was november 1rst, she passed out. She woke up after 2 hours and found herself in a dark room and she heard phsyco laughing… She yelled but nobody could hear her, the unknown person stabbed her in the stomach… and she was never heard from again…
Well at least the grammar in this one is nicer than the abomination I willingly chose to start this thread off at like 1 AM last night. That being said, let's take a closer look...
Sarra had just moved it to a mansion with her family.
She moved "it"? You have to spell correctly because it sounds like you're trying to say she accommodated her family with that clown from the Stephen King movie.
She got a vision, a strange vision, a vision that was like she was possessed.
This just kills me. It's not that she started acting possessed or something, but she got visions of her being possessed. I just have to interpret that like she's just in some out of body experience watching, like, Youtube videos of some screamer plastered onto her face.
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Like this or something
She wasnt in pain or anything...She was worried...She gasped...She yelled
If you hear "sheshesheshe" enough it starts sounding like a flamboyant chef using a salt shaker.
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she heard phsyco laughing… She yelled but nobody could hear her
Except the psycho.
the unknown person stabbed her in the stomach… and she was never heard from again…
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Alright, this piece was overall, more well done than the first one grammatically. However, good grammar alone can only get you so far. The repetitive nature of the story dragged out the events, and nothing was really explained about what was going on (an element of being unknown can also add creepiness, but this just makes it worse when nothing is backing it up.) It was pretty forgettable, but most creepypastas are admittedly like that to be honest.

Anyway, I give it a 69/420, and that's that.
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #2: HALllowwweeee

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the pastas burn my brain, but the analysis is good
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #2: HALllowwweeee

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well hold on to your hats because it's about to get worse. a lot worse.

Okay guys I've found it. I might have found the summit. The best thing ever. This story is so amazingly awful, that it literally does every little thing. This is either the greatest troll story ever written, or it is just a pure gold mine for things like this. Just to make sure you know right now, it's Sonic Fanfiction.

Story #3: Tails Doll Curse

I'm not directly linking this one as it is so hilariously NSFW.

...

:darkblah:

...You still with me? Okay. I don't even know what to say about this. I don't even know where to start.
Summary: Tails Doll comes alive and kills everyone. Lots blood and gore language and sex
oh this is gonna be good
By: TommyMouse aka Tommy the Mouse aka TommyTM aka Run the Hedgehog
oh this is gonna be real good
Disclaimer: I don't own Sonic The Hedgehog if I did Sonic would die alot and Tails would be the star!
oh man this is getting me like euphoric
"Sonic come back to bed and stop looking up at the stars like Goodm,an from that Twilight Zone episode" said Amy his wife.
Amy said that to herself. To herself; no one else was supposed to be listening.
Sonic said "I'm not I swear I heard some ****** ANNOYING sound coming from that bush."
Cursing now, Sonic? Stop hanging out with Shadow while he's trying to find that DAMN FOURTH CHAOS EMERALD.
Amy said in a sexy voice "mmmm I think I can take your mind off it." Sonic smiled happily and said "OK" and went to bed with Amy and they got busy ;)
o god no
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I can't review this next part. I'm sorry I just can't. It's too incredible for this website.
Tails Doll slit his throat bloods was pouring all over the hardwood floor.
Well that must've made a mess. (but i bet that room was already p messy as is huehuehue)
OH SONIC WHY'D YOU HAVE TO DIE!
because
Tails Doll slit his throat bloods was pouring all over the hardwood floor.
Oh man. That was incredible. That was just on a level of glory that I as a lesser being can not comprehend. I have absolutely no idea how this story has gone unnoticed for 8 years. It shouldn't be that way. This deserves to be a classic. i r8 it 6/9

If you want to know if I'm still going to be doing stories after this, my response would have to be OH YEAH ***** I'M COMING!"
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incredible
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #3: TAILS DOLL: X

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Review my Rose creepypasta this instant.
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fox boy he's reviewing bad creppynoodles stop
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Re: revenge of the creepypasta like (Story #3: TAILS DOLL: X

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what hapPENED TO THE LAYOUT IS THIS THE END OF TIMES?
eboy wrote:fox boy he's reviewing bad creppynoodles stop
thank you for the concern but i'm not restricting as much as i did in the older thread. let's take a look.
Fox Boy wrote:Review my Rose creepypasta this instant.
sure thing broski
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Story # ooooooooo0004: Rose
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Well let's see. This didn't have sonic b0ner material, and it didn't have RED pokemon.
Why they got it for me, I don’t know. Perhaps they just thought I needed a place to jot down all my thoughts. Maybe it was just because they had skipped out on a Christmas and Birthday present for me, and wanted to assure me that they still cared.
I'm sorry but I'm imagining him opening up the notepad for the first time only find this drawn on every page
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Sadly, and expectedly, I never did hear him. I just assumed he didn’t know how to work the radios in heaven.
Well most dogs aren't. (I'm lucky enough to have the exception. Fido was conducting air traffic at six.)
I’ve bought some equipment for my project, but I’m not sure where to start. I figured I’ll have to do this all telepathically, as the only thing I’ve heard about animals actually talking was from Odie who only said “I love you”. I don’t want to condition Rose to speak words; I want to find a way for her to express her own thoughts and ideas through full length sentences.
this is how im imagining this **** going down right about now.
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Dying on impact, it appeared her car burst into flames and mangled her body up pretty badly. It was enough to where the local police took their time identifying her.
the truck was in a rush to find heaven as well
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Okay, but seriously, that story was pretty good. It had the same recurring themes throughout all of it, and it really tied up quite nicely. The fact that the narrator (notebook guy) just gets absorbed in the project is a little kooky (I know that he was projecting his past feelings from Hodges onto the project, but still.) However, most creepypastas have something like that, and this was a nice read.
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!!!
Thank you!
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