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where i am where will i be?

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It's like 4:30 am right now, pretty damn bored. Anyway, wrote this poem in the meantime.

where i am
where will i be?
Above skies
Under tree?

Tis the night
I kiss away
while my senses
Slowly fall alseep

Makes my heart break
these thoughts
they force my body lay
while i make
that poison dart part away

this arbitrary trite
that vary in length
i chose to write
for just a joke with no strength

so now i stare at this "clever" dancer
between the chest
waiting, for this rare cancer
to hit em just in jest


Thoughts?
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Re: where i am where will i be?

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where did you come from
where did you go
cotton-eye joe
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Post by Nano »

I was never particularly good at poetry, let alone decoding it haha.

I think it's pretty neat though. Has some odd flow to it at some points, and I can't honestly understand what's going on at some points, but I sense a lot of potential.

Of course take what I say with a grain of salt. As I said, I'm terrible at poetry.
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eboy wrote:where did you come from
where did you go
cotton-eye joe
That's deep bro.
Fox Boy wrote:I was never particularly good at poetry, let alone decoding it haha.

I think it's pretty neat though. Has some odd flow to it at some points, and I can't honestly understand what's going on at some points, but I sense a lot of potential.

Of course take what I say with a grain of salt. As I said, I'm terrible at poetry.
Don't worry, there are some hidden things, but none of it is anything worth decoding or understanding, just a mediocre joke or two. It's a pretty bad "poem."
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