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20 Doomed Islanders (DIS-DISCONTINUED)

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1.Omelet
2.Leaf
3.Linds
4.Nintendawg
5.AB
6.PIF
7.SkyGinge
8.Crash
9.Mooncow
10.Fusion
11.Chaos
12.Wacky
13.Techno
14.Retro
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17.Kausa
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20.Mana
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CHAPTER 1, PART 1

It was a bright, sunny Summer morning, with robins chirping in the trees happily, and forest critters scampering about for food. Among them was a quite settlement of a few humans who decided to live there instead of the main city, Chaopolis. Besides, they were only a few miles from it and could just drive over if they needed anything. But that isn't really important right now. Among these people, a villager by the name of Techno resided. He was a tall, slim fellow, with sort of a smug look on his face at all time. He also liked to wear silver accessories often. Very often.... Right now he was wearing a dull silver shirt, with darker gray pants, and with bright silver highlights running across his hair. His eyes also seemed metallic, as he was born with bright grey eyes that shined radiantly. Ironically, despite his shining appearance, he was a bad boy. He was known for his awful reputation, like for instance, hot wiring cars and stealing from local drug stores. Yeah, he was pretty disliked.

Back to where we were, Techno was outside, smoking a cigarette, when the local mail carrier came scampering over to him. The boy was Eevee, but that wasn't his real name. No one knew his real name, only as Eevee. He was a normal boy- well, people would like to say normal, but he isn't. Eevee loved to wear dog ears and a bushy tail on his back to make a mock impersonation of an Eevee. The dog boy thing dropped his mail bag in front of Techno's feet, dug inside it with his muzzle, and pulled out a fancy envelope, sprinkled with gold glitter and a silver stamp seal. Techno pulled the letter out of his mouth, looking at it with a confused expression as Eevee ran over the next house to deliver more mail. He finally opened the letter up, only to be hit in the face with silver glitter. How annoying... he thought to himself. He proceeded to read it.

http://i50.tinypic.com/33f46xd.jpg

A vacation, on a tropical island? Did he win some sort of contest or something that he forgot he entered? Well, anyways, he wasn't going to bother much with the thoughts, a free vacation only comes once in a while! Though, he was puzzled by the shortness of the letter. Shouldn't there be a few more details, like where he'll be staying in, or for how long? when will he be going, and what transportation will be provided? And plus, he had never even heard of the island until now. And what kind of a name is that? Is it some sort of code, maybe? He just shrugged, not wanting to think about it anymore, since he hated thinking, and shoved the letter in his pocket. He'll try to see if the local ferry could take him to the island. By the coordinates given, it should only take about two days to arrive there. Techno then went back into his home, getting ready to have a well earned vacation that he so desperately needed.

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Late Monday afternoon, Techno had arrived at the ports of Chaolocity, one of the busiest and bustiest cities of Chao Island. He breathed in the rich, salty scent that came off of the ocean. He really loved admiring the ocean: it offered a gentle, subtle peace that nothing else could offer him.

A far off horn belted out, breaking Techno out of his trance of peace. he quickly recollected his thoughts and rushed to the pier that held the ferry heading to Hetad Island. He noticed that several other people were waiting to board the ferry. in particular, he noticed a group of three that had set themselves off from the others. One had a pair of big, blue floppy ears adorning her head and was busy doodling in a sketch book, another seemed pretty normal except for a big glowing "X" that was on the back of his t-shirt. The other was what appeared to be a robotic chao. For some reason, these three appealed to him, so he decided to go and introduce himself to them.

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Meanwhile, at another section of a pier, there was a pair who were holding each other close together, admiring the setting sun. One of them had a big pair of bat wings sprouting off of his back: the other had a bushy, pink tale, wagging happily. They were known as the cutest couple of Chao Island: Pink ice Fox and Atomic Bat. but they usually would just go by Pink and Atomic.

"Isn't it gorgeous, Atommy?" crooned Pink. "Atommy" nodded in response as Pink snuggled closer to him. Meanwhile, from afar in the darkest parts of the pair, two sets of glowing, red eyes emerged, forming a malicious toothy grin each from beneath them. The faces began to laugh hideously.

"They really think they are the greatest pair on Chao Island? I feel so sorry for them..."

"Mhhhm, yes, they honestly don't know that we really are the best pair Chao Island has ever seen. Looks like we'll need to teach them a lesson..."

And just like that, the faces vanished from sight. It was an odd phenomena indeed...

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The ferry's horn belted out, signalling to all the travelers that it was time to board the ferry. They gathered their belongings and climbed aboard.

On the deck, some servicemen assisted in carrying their luggage to the storage room as they were directed to go and wait in the sitting room. The passengers obliged and went to the room, only to be met with a startling sight.

A crazed looking guy, with stringy hair and an eccentrically colored shirt was at the wheel with a half full bottle of beer in his free hand. He took a swig from the bottle and let out a holler, "WES GONA GIT DIS PERTY STERTED!" He then turned the key (which was foolishly left in the ignition), starting the boat and began to move the wheel as if he were a race car driver. The boat jerked and swayed, causing the others to tumble onto the floor as they let out horrified shreiks of pain and suffering at the top of their lungs. A small craggy boulder jutted out of the ocean nearby, and upon seeing it, the crazed maniac turned the boat to face it and started towards it at full speed.

"We're gonna die!" screamed one of the female passengers. Just then, the captain appeared at the door, noticing the loon at the wheel and tackled him to the floor. He then got up and quickly regained control of the boat, missing the boulder by mere seconds. Everyone let out a sigh of relief.

"I'm so sorry about that, laddies," apologized the captain, "I have no idea who that is, but I'm glad I got here in enough time to save us all from crashing into that there rock and surely suffer from a burning demise. Yep, that would of been mighty nasty..."

"Can you just forget about that and take us to Hetad Island, please? I'm sure all of us could use a nice rest after this ordeal..." murmered the female with the bunny ears from the pier.
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (Chapter one, part one)

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I think that is pretty interesting
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (Chapter one, part one)

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Is this because of the "what if we were all stranded on an island" thread because I was just reading it and hoping someone would do this.
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (Chapter one, part one)

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Nah. If you were one of those who read my short stories topic, you would have known I've been working on this =)

Also, some new people appear in part two. One is a robot, one is really popular and one is a fox. There'll be more but I'll just say those.
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:p Ah well either way I'll stick around, it seems interesting and I'm already comfy on the story rug~
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Yay ^^

And also you're in this if you didn't know. I should of posted the cast on here. I'll update the first post.
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (Chapter one, part one)

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thank you for making me this glorious
i just hope i can continue to be portrayed accurately and consistently for a decent amount of time
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Oh glob man, I'ma be in the cast :D
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I'm not in the cast...Oh well, didn't expect to be.
Also, I just realized what Hetad Island was literally the MOMENT after I pressed No.
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (Chapter one, part one)

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^ I would have to have named the character Titu. You know why I couldn't do that...

And sure you do >w>

Part 3 of chapter one is up. Only two more parts left and then onto the next chapter.

Part 4 will be pretty lengthy as it introduces all of the characters and their back stories and such *෴*
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OKAY VILLAINS, LET US TANGO. I'll fly circles around your nefarious plot.
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Good thing I am not in this.
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^ IKR?

Also, i like this story.Its really interesting
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Sorry for the delay, still working on the next part :(
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Hah, I like the addition of the drunk coot.
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Re: 20 Doomed Islanders (DISCONTINUED)

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Oh look I decided to work on this again

Ch. 2 Part 1

Soon, everyone had settled down after the scare they had earlier and were mingling amongst each other. Some were talking like they had known the other for years, even possible letting out a secret or two, while curious ears of others perked up to eavesdrop on the others. some decided to be alone and listen to their ePods or create an elaborate drawing on their sketchpads. Others were busy sleeping making the most grotesque sounds anyone can imagine. It was like any normal boat ride one might have.

In the far corner, a group of 3 were talking amongst themselves, getting to know each other so that they wouldn't have to spend their vacation alone in their rooms doing things not suitable for mentioning on this site. One was furiously shoveling down eggs into his mouth, eggy residue flying out in globs of saliva as he spoke, another in average teen clothing except for the fact that he had a big bushy raccoon tail hanging out from his pants and the last just a normal Hondurian girl. They introduced each other, the egg eating one being called Omelet, to no surprise. the one with the tail was called Evan, and he told them that he "was" a tanuki, but the others didn't believe him. The girl was named Linds, there's nothing special about her so bother asking.

"So," said Omelet, still eating from what seemed like an endless container of eggs, "did you guys get invitations too? Or did you just happen to find tickets online and buy them?"

"Well, actually, niether of those apply to me." answered Evan. "My friend minty gave them to me. He was planning to go, but an emergancy surfaced that didn't permit him to go. So, he decided to give them to his best friend, Wacky, but apparently she already had tickets so I was the recipient."
"I beat up a man and stole the tickets." replied Linds bluntly. The other two just stared at her with mortified expressions. Linds sighed, "It was a joke, obviously. I got my tickets in the mail. Why would a girl like me go around beating up people?"

"Well, you are a little bulky for your age..." Evan snorted. Linds just glared at him with red hot eyes but decided just to ignore his jest. On the other side of the boat, Pink was snuggling into Bat's "neck fluff", which was really just part of his jacket, while the crazed maniac in the cage made gurgling noises at them. They tried their best to ignore it, but the more time that passed the louder it gurgled and grunted until he was pratically shreiking and bouncing around in the cage, causing the two to escape to the bathroom to have their "privacy". Nearby, a group of passengers were whispering amongst each other, pointing at a girl listening to her iPod, not noticing them.

"What IS that thing?" a kid with blond hair stuttered to another kid.
He looked over, "I think that's Satan. It has horns and a tail just like a devil, and blood is pouring from it's mouth..." Obviously, the girl did NOT have any of those features, but to the group of three, they saw those attributes and feared that she was in fact Satan. The girl, who's name was Kausa, soon noticed they were glancing at her and passing nasty glares and decided to confront them.

"Excuse me, but do I have something on my face that is oh so intruiguing? Or is it the fact that I'm a girl which none of you morons may have never seen before?" she said in the sweetest but demeaning tone she knew.
The three started to back away, in fear that the imaginary fire they saw erupting from her mouth would bake them inside out. "SPARE US, SATAN. WE ARE PURE AND OUR SOULS ARE NOT RIPE!" the one with blond hair screamed out as the trio ran to the deck to escape her.

Kausa just shrugged. "They must be those new age kids that are addicted to LSD or something."
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Hey! You put me in this despite the fact that I'd been absent for two or so month era before this first came out? Thank you, I actually really appreciate it(even though I don't think I've been in it yet from my skim readkng) seeing as I dot expect to be in any of these things due o me almost never going on the Chatbox. So thank you very much :D

I'll try to find some time tonight to give it a proper teview like it deserves because the quality of writing looks pretty neat too! Please continue :D
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There are two Eevee's on this site so which Eevee were you meaning *Laughs* It is a pretty good story I must admit but I still want you for dinner >:3
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