The Adventures of Penn and Cake (Chao Fanfic) (Intro)

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The Adventures of Penn and Cake (Chao Fanfic) (Intro)

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It was dawn in the land of Fruit Plains, ruled by the monarch of the Chao Kingdom. It was a cold Spring day, in the month of May, the dew was sticking to the rocks like a bee on a sunflower. In the Fruit Plains there is always Chao playing in the fields. There are two Chao in particular that will change the whole Chao Kingdom. Their names are Penn and Cake.

*Inside the house of Penn and Cake, as the scene changes on the floor, seeing that the floor is not well picked up with scattered items like toys, magazines, and a whole lot of food that appears to be moldy that has not been picked up in awhile, the scene changes inside the kitchen with a bunch of plates on the counter and in the sink, that have a lot of food crumbs on them, and are not washed.*

PENN:

The scene then changes inside the bedroom, seeing Penn in his bed with half of the covers over him. Penn is a Neutral/Power Chao with a lot of energy. Penn likes to go on adventures and fight very vicious monsters. Penn does not have that good of a work ethic, he doesn't pick up anything of his or do any chores. He has anger problems and will sometime get out of control if he doesn't get what he wants. His main method of attacking is using his fists.

CAKE:

The scene then changes on Cake whom is sleeping in his bed, with all of the covers on him. Cake is a Neutral/Swim/Power Chao whom is one year older than Penn. Cake is very laid back and is very lazy. Cake eats almost every morsel of food there is that is available. He is very chubby and does not clean up after himself. Cake doesn't mind much, unless his food is gone. Cake goes so crazy once his food is eaten, he will literally punch holes in the walls of the house. He is very good at wrestling, so he prefers to tackle and take down his enemies as quickly as possible. People who are faster than him usually can take him down easily.

*The scene change to an alarm clock, which looks broken. The time reads "8:30 A.M.", which is the time the alarm clock usually goes off at. The alarm makes a very loud ringing noise, Penn is so startled he literally falls out of bed. Cake just grunts as he jabs his fist on the alarm clock, breaking it into small pieces.*

*Penn yawns as he goes down the stairs and walks into the kitchen. He walks to the refrigerator and grabs some milk. Then he opens his kitchen cabinet and grabs a box of Fruit Loops and two bowls. Penn then pours the cereal into the two bowls and pours milk into both. He then goes into his kitchen drawer and grabs two spoons and puts one in both bowls.*

END OF PART ONE.
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Wow, this is pretty cool!
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Thank you so much! I have not done a fan-fic for a long time, this is my first since then. I'm glad you liked it! I will do a part two if the viewers liked it.
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PART TWO PART TWO PART TWO PART TWO
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Alright, I will make a part two tonight. I will be working on it now, it may not be up for a couple hours though. Thanks for all the great feedback!
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Wow.

This is, like, a script or something.

I applaud you for making your first post since 2010.
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Your Welcome! :chaohappy: :chaohappy: :chaohappy:
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I can't tell if Eboy was complimenting or not...

Ya, you're welcome~ glad we could help.
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It was a compliment.

This is perfect.
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LOL.
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The Adventures of Penn and Cake (Chao Fanfic) (Part Two)

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The scene appears as it was left off in part one, Penn is in the kitchen with two bowls of cereal.

*Penn picks up both of the bowls of cereal and places them on the dining room table, he ran into his and Cake's bedroom, as Cake would still be asleep.*

"Cake, get up, BREAKFAST is ready!" yelled Penn.

*Cake's eyes open wide, as the word "BREAKFAST" is still echoing in his mind, he bolts out of bed and down the stairs so fast, even Penn is shocked.*

"FOOOOOOOOD!!!" yelled Cake, nearly crushing the stairs on the way down.

*He would then run to the dining room table as he just gobbles both bowls of cereal down, not even leaving one little Fruit Loop left.

*Penn at this point comes to realization as he runs down the stairs, into the dining room, shocked. He sees Cake rubbing his fat stomach, also seeing that both bowls of cereal are completely gone.*

"My cereal..." says Penn, his head down in disappointment.

*Cake would look at Penn, confused. As he finally realizes what he has done wrong.*

"Sorry, I was hungry... I thought they were both mine because I usually have two bowls of cereal in the morning..." says Cake, feeling guilty.

"Eh, it's fine. I'll just go get another bowl." says Penn, walking towards the kitchen cabinet.

*Cake's eyes would widen as Penn opens the cabinet, Penn would see that the box of cereal is gone.*

"Erm, where's the cereal, Cake?" said Penn.

*Cake would look like he were about to throw up, as Cat coughs up the box of cereal, all ripped up in pieces.*

"I'm so sorry Penn... I didn't eat that much last night..." said Cake.

*Penn would have an angry look on his face, looking to about strangle Cake.*

"If you don't want to have no food for a week, I suggest you go get us another box of Cereal." said Penn, annoyed.

*Cake's eyes would widen, thinking of a way to get out of this.*

"I will get the cereal later!" exclaimed Cake, hoping he will get out of this request.

"No, get it now. You have ten seconds to get outside." said Penn, as he would start to countdown.

*Cake's eyes would begin to widen more, as he bolts out the door.*

END OF PART TWO

Next time on the Adventures of Penn and Cake, Cake will begin on his quest to re-pay Penn back with a box of cereal!
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Who's Cat?
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Sorry, those were typos. They are fixed now.
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It's alright.
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Did you guys like part two?
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LOL. It's a funny preview of Pt3
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Of course I did.

I like your script-style approach. That was actually a great idea.
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Thank you once again, I've tried to improve a lot since my last stories.
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Part 3 will start being written now! So keep an eye out!
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PENN & CAKE
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STUPID SHOW
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This won't be anything like that show.
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